Sundays
You smiled the blue sky
floated round in silver pieces
the air tasted sweet
Colours passed through me
Raining from the stars
Each had a flavor, a feeling
Each had a bigger smile
The sun walked with me
stretching, living
Voicing its golden words
It kissed the land-trickling
into the warm breath of night
Bathing in burning rays of fire
This morning you cried grey sky
Hanging from my head
Dragging back my hair
I tried to swallow my heart
like a boy caught smoking
my sleeve caught fire
You watched impassive
through closed eyes.
When the sun rose
It was a dry hard biscuit
floated round in silver pieces
the air tasted sweet
Colours passed through me
Raining from the stars
Each had a flavor, a feeling
Each had a bigger smile
The sun walked with me
stretching, living
Voicing its golden words
It kissed the land-trickling
into the warm breath of night
Bathing in burning rays of fire
This morning you cried grey sky
Hanging from my head
Dragging back my hair
I tried to swallow my heart
like a boy caught smoking
my sleeve caught fire
You watched impassive
through closed eyes.
When the sun rose
It was a dry hard biscuit
posted by Sue hardy-Dawson at 5/28/2006 08:46:00 PM
15 Comments:
This is a bit of a reworking of something I wrote a while back. Happy Bank holiday
I fear to know what's happen when i understand it between the line but i'm not a Psy so i don't want to do that. I love the style but it's look sad in the end for me.
Take care of yourself.
Sad, but very true to life, I think. I love the analogy about breathing in like a school boy caught smoking. And I love the reality of the disappointment setting in as a hard biscuit.
You come up the with the most incredible and unusual of imagery and metaphors..I just love it!
The analogy of a hard biscuit was brilliant..you make me look at things differently.
Thank you.
:)
Carba it was about being sad but it was about sadness long ago and is not hurtful anymore
Jade P thankyou, dissapointment makes the world a very different place and that moment of exposure that can make your heart leap painfully
Pins I'm so pleased that is a wonderful compliment, when we're in love even grey days are bright and sunny and of course the opposit is true of sadness and lonelyness
Hello, I stumbled upon your blog. Your poem is very nice and vivid in its images.
How very vivid! as if i could feel the words. I'll always wonder what made the lines
When the sun rose
It was a dry hard biscuit come out.. you are simply amazing sue! you rock! :p
Stormy Z so pleased you dropped by
Promd B I don't know what to say thankyou so much
This what I a poetry in every way...The sense are so powerful...
was it a ginger nut?
lovely poem.
Dear all, my internet is playing up badly so I'm having great difficulty posting, so don't think I'm ignoring everyone it's just difficult to get any of the blogging pages to load, meanwhile thanks for the many lovely comments.
Most amazing! I read and swallowed my heart, like a boy caught smoking...
It can cause hicups
Or is that the diaphram?
Fin it must be a widespread prob the blogogiste strikes again thank-you for your wonderful comment
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