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Haiku Haiku all fall down

Haipu

If pigs really flew
Folk who’d been poohed on by birds
would wear larger hats.

Tiger

Amber eyes lashed coal
dark lace lines creep antique gold
part of tree and grass




Elephant

Great mud beast cracked baked
tusk trooping trunk trailing tank
creased worried gentle.

13 Comments:

Blogger NicoleBraganza said...

Wow, you seem to have a gift for haiku -- you have captured the beauty of these majestic animals. And of course, the first one is great fun.

4:03 PM  
Blogger Carbanion Tolodine said...

I don't Haiku, but the description of the animals are beautiful. You write with an indescribable talent.

Bye, take care of yourself,

11:31 PM  
Blogger Prmod Bafna said...

very nicely written haikus how beautifully you bring out the animals :)

10:21 AM  
Blogger blue rogue said...

your quaint pieces formed images of a vibrant literary zoo in my head. :)

p.s. I didn't know about you and pastel. Call it a lucky guess. Better yet, blame it on the astonishing visuals of your previous poem. :)

11:30 AM  
Blogger GEL said...

Love the humor in "haipu!" :D

11:30 PM  
Blogger finnegan said...

If pigs really flew, they'd be bacon in the sun.

6:40 AM  
Blogger NicoleBraganza said...

hahaha - good one finnegan. creative genius!!! :)

7:13 AM  
Blogger Russell Ragsdale said...

Sue, did you know that pigs do fly? I can tell by the stuff that lands on me from time to time. Now elephants, that would be truely scary!

9:55 AM  
Blogger Pincushion said...

Chuckles!
This is such fun and so beautifully done!
Wonderful!
Now..let me just go get that hat ;)

5:58 PM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

haipu is the BEST.
and finn has flying pigs?

4:39 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Finished all my essays hooray!!! Thanks for all lovely comments will be blog surfing happily soon-yipee-yipee

Finn have you been dreaming in bacon again

Russel don't be silly that's the flying cows!

Carba thank-you

Prmod I'm eternally fascinated by tigres and elephants

Blue rogue, I'd love a literary zoo, what a lovely immage, I may have to write one now

Silver Moon, CJ, Pins hold onto your hats and avoid brown stepping stones

6:54 PM  
Blogger Anna Piutti said...

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8:32 PM  
Blogger Anna Piutti said...

This is absolutely brilliant! I love it.

"Haipu" inevitably reminded me of this poem by Stan Rice:

http://www.geocities.com/TheTropics/Shores/7484/lib/poetry/rice_stan.htm#rice2

8:34 PM  

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