Pebbles
Words are like pebbles. I weigh them in my hands
touching their surface; some egg smooth; some
rough; home spun. I must know them like old shoes
Remember the power of their first shy
kiss; full on the lips; how my heart fluttered
as I cast them out across the still lake of
paper. They fall where they will; a fresco
of sounds squeezed from my pen, scratched out and cast
out again, sending forth ripples as I
place them on the page. Some glow, like runes in
moonlight as they touch another; others
fade; sink to buff shade; a handful of dust
disappointment on the lips. Words are like
pebbles; they go where the river takes them
touching their surface; some egg smooth; some
rough; home spun. I must know them like old shoes
Remember the power of their first shy
kiss; full on the lips; how my heart fluttered
as I cast them out across the still lake of
paper. They fall where they will; a fresco
of sounds squeezed from my pen, scratched out and cast
out again, sending forth ripples as I
place them on the page. Some glow, like runes in
moonlight as they touch another; others
fade; sink to buff shade; a handful of dust
disappointment on the lips. Words are like
pebbles; they go where the river takes them
6 Comments:
Yet more coursework - if you have the time I would apreciate your imput Looking forward to visiting you all soon Sue
Hi Sue, I am so happy to see you are still here. I have been terrible about blogging, but ready to get started again. I promise to have a new recipe up for you this week, any requests?
not much good at giving advice or critiques, just know that i like this. i like the idea of words being something given by nature. something outside of us that comes as gift.
The river of your pen smooths these words perfectly!!
Hi
Like the sounds and rhythm. Some good rhymes. The poem could work well arranged in a river's shape.
Beware of cliches... always a worry to me. heart fluttering? Bit greetings card.
Lips used twice?
Anyway - I like it.
Hope you're well. last school visit tomorrow and my marathon radio commitment coming to an end. A holiday soon and some writing.
XXX
Hi,
Enjoyed reading this, fellow lover of words and art. Sorry I've not stopped by in a while. Somehow I'd lost your blog address. Just saw you listed on Gulnaz's blog, so I clicked. Glad to see you're still writing! :D
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