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Eve

In the beginning
From a box
He pulled buff clay
And spun a ball
So vast it swallowed me

I slept numbly
curled tight
blind in the burning
alien sun. I listened
to the distant thunder
Land splitting the virgin sea

Silence so loud
It danced
to the beat
Of my new heart
The first rains
Kissed me; full upon the mouth

Plants stretched out
Yawning
I could hear
Them speak, how it hurt
this birth. He told me
once, it only cost him a rib

The apple? Well
after that
We couldn’t hear the trees,
Strange how you miss the simple things
Even the serpent was silent
and the rain? The rain was only wet

11 Comments:

Blogger iamnasra said...

I heard the sory many times ...the story of Adam and Eve (we call her Hawaa) ...allured to the forbidden test...

she was so frigle as she was created by one of his ribs..

The sory goes on ...

Now I hear it from you in very different way...

Very touching and sad...Loved the feeling that arises when your eyes read the poetic words of yours...

Thank you for sharing it with us

12:24 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Nasra I should love to hear the story as you know it, what do you call Adam?

4:39 PM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

your spelling might be crap but your poetry sure isn't. great. loved it.

5:22 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thank-you CJ and a warm welcome back

6:22 PM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

its wonderful, the way you have described eve being born through nature's forces. beginings so full of promise and passion. its sad when the passion fades out with the promise.

btw, hawaa is pronounced as hav-wa
and adam is called adam, except that the pronunciation is a lil different. adam=aadum, the first a is more open mouthed, not the second a. the d is soft, like the sound of 'the'.

8:07 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thank-you Gulnaz, so like aathem does the story also differ slightly? What does Adam mean if Hawaa means allureed to the forbidden test?

1:03 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

I think I just invented a new word 'allureed' of corse I meant allured

3:14 PM  
Blogger Gama said...

Adan y Eva that's what we call them is Spanish.

Nice work!

7:38 PM  
Blogger Patry Francis said...

Wonderful last line. I like the rhythm here, the way it stretches with the poem.

6:28 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Gamma it's lovely to hear all the different names in the stories from different cultures thank-you

Patry thank-you

1:43 PM  
Blogger Dorko said...

Came over by way of Gama's recommendation. Loved the poem! Thanks for setting it down.
Cheerios!
Dorko

5:28 PM  

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