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Transubstantiation

Slumped by the
pool she let
hold her face
Rising from
among the
rocks and weeds
a hand reached

Lingering
Beckoning
Calling her
Down into
cool, cool water

Hand in hand
two dancers
they swam
Kissing the
feathered feet
of boatmen
Nipping at
the spinning
blossem tresses
Cast by ghosts
of trees

Skin dappled
wearing the
rich textures
of earth.
Coils of land
slipped away
loosening
their grip
Weightless she
forgot her legs

In the spring
she found a
lover amber
eyed and a
broad stiff snout

19 Comments:

Blogger Lorena said...

"Skin dappled
wearing the
rich textures
of earth. "
wow, this is very sensual and such great imagery from reading it.
great poem :)

9:57 PM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

"In the spring
she found a
lover amber
eyed and a
broad stiff snout"

delightful! *clap,clap,clap* :)

could you explain to me the title of this poem though, please?

10:15 AM  
Blogger Neel said...

Gulnaz chose the line that stuck out in my mind. I would say delightful also, but i will add pleasant and adorable.

11:11 AM  
Blogger Potted-flower said...

Everyone got here before me. : (

I like the idea of losing legs in water, 'Weightless she forgot her legs'. Yeah, thats pretty, it feels pretty...

6:11 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Lorena I'm glad you feel that, there is something sensual about the graceful movements of fish, and the way light changes as they move.

Gulnaz Transubstantiation is the name given to the Christian belief in the transformation of wine and bread into the body and blood of Christ, the theory which some Christians see as more symbolic is that it becomes these things without changing its appearence. So hopefully I haven't offended anyone with the transformation of my woman into a fish.

Neel thankyou, I tried your recipie it was great.

Nice to meet you Potted flower please feel free to call again

8:50 PM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

the idea of human being able to become fish like has always been a fascination to me what with mermaids and mermen. this piece is sensual but also so warm and gentle and thankfully singularly lacking any 'male' notion of sensual.

12:08 PM  
Blogger Potted-flower said...

It's my pleasure!

5:02 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

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6:50 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

CJ me too, I love the myths about mermaids changlings and magic. Down by the pond at the back of scool there's a wild shaped tree that trails in the water like a girl bending with her hair trailing down.

6:51 PM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

thanks for the explanation and i like that tree by the pool in your school yard.

8:01 PM  
Blogger iamnasra said...

insightful, I love how your image have been potrayed so lightly in a very remarkable way...(hope my spelling is okay, I tend to be lost without spell-check)

7:05 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Gulnaz perhapse she became a tree after she was a fish, and perhaps she needs a human touch to release her.

Iamnasra, as I can't spell anyway I shan't be able to tell and I wouldn't mind if I could

8:57 AM  
Blogger Amie said...

i like this. sensual and magical...

9:35 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Hi Amie, the wood is a very magical place it's like the whole place holds its breath

5:42 PM  
Blogger Russell Ragsdale said...

Sue, you have such a touch. It is like you are stroking the myth and imagination that can be accessed from ordinary things. When you softly run your hand across them, they respond and rise up for us to view. They live and purr and come to rub against our legs for more. Your access to this world is a priviledge you share with us and we are never sorry.

Another wonderful poetic experience, Thanks!

1:05 AM  
Blogger Gama said...

I got here through Russell.

Nicely done and very delightful :-)

6:46 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Hi Russel lovely to hear from you thank-you love the idea of a poem rubbing round your legs and purring has to be the ultimate poemcat

Nice to meet you Gama feel free to come over from Russel's anytime

5:25 PM  
Blogger Potted-flower said...

write more poetry!! please!!

7:21 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Potted flower always glad to oblige

7:55 PM  

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