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This World

Loosely Based on 'This Room by Imtiaz Dharker'
except her's is a poem of celebration,
and mine well you'll hopefully get the picture.
It was written as part of a workshop I did at school



This world is closing in
On itself, blocking out
Its dry sun
In search of dull dark
Soft cool air.

The trees are sinking back in
Its parched earth.
From light too bright leaves
Are curling back in their wombs.

This is the end of life
Brick it up
When the jeering faces offer bald black
Lies, when bellies stuffed wring the moist
Land-sky and earth are weeping
In soiled, garments
Past the clouds of sulphur, acid, poison
Swallowing the grasses
No one is looking or hears

Inside they build a boat
And cast themselves off
In the sea of their minds

My heart is outside crying

18 Comments:

Blogger Neel said...

this is absolutely beautiful!

1:34 AM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

you have penned such a dark moment, one can almost feel the darkness and its stifling.

-My heart is outside crying
sums it up well, tears of frustration and helplessness.

3:09 PM  
Blogger Neel said...

Sue, I am happy to visit your blog, it's wonderful!

6:09 AM  
Blogger Amie said...

hey real nice!

and sue i'm glad you got it all up this bloglinks. uh but can we edit my blog title? it's supposed to be "amiething goes" (derived from amie/ anything goes). :)

10:27 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Neel thank-you

Gulnaz, all the big buisness lies and appathy gets to me some times, I wonder what the world we have to offer our children will be like

Amie I'm really sorry I will try sort it out now unfortunately because I'm dyslexic I misread things often

sorry

5:23 PM  
Blogger Amie said...

ei thanks! it's ok now! :)

11:27 AM  
Blogger iamnasra said...

When I read your poem I was about to cry..I could fel the turn and obtsacles of life standing to every step that we take...You took my breath away with your poem...

Thank you so much for the well wishes..Im all well now Im back to my normal self

2:44 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thank-you iamnasra for your kind words. I'm glad you're feeling better

3:55 PM  
Blogger Roger Stevens said...

I like this poem a lot. I've just been reading back through your poems. It must be ages since I lst dropped by. There are some really nice poems there.

Have you thought about getting a book together? Did I ask you that?

1:26 AM  
Blogger Lorena said...

great poem.

"Inside they build a boat
And cast themselves off
In the sea of their minds

My heart is outside crying"

i love those lines. deeply moving.

3:30 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Hi Roger thank-you, nice to hear from you. I think when I do do a book it will be a children's one. Perhapse you should do a blog anthology on the radio blog

5:47 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Lorena thank-you for your kind words. May I also attempt a link?

5:49 PM  
Blogger Lorena said...

Definitely, of course. Would be honored :)

6:02 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Brilliant

6:06 PM  
Blogger iamnasra said...

I have come back to read this poem...Im must been charmed with this poem LOL

It is no doubt your best poem...

6:52 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Iamnasra, I'm glad you like my poem
your wonderful words have given me much pleasure

5:54 PM  
Blogger iamnasra said...

I seem to always come back and read this poem...I feel its the right words to read after what had happened in London

8:44 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Without doubt they are the people with the button and we are the sheep in their sights

9:55 PM  

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