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Hanging

Recently when visitig English August ('A's blog)
I saw he had set a write a 55 word poem challenge
so I had a go. If you would also like to feel free to post them here

A pegged out sky
Drenched the trees
With rays of light
Perfect blue

While whispering
Leaves tried to
Spread the word

Beyond time
Cloudless birds
Vault a white plane
Writing its tail
Across the open page

And I sit and wonder
Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms

24 Comments:

Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Sorry folks have resisted word frgh for as long as I can, so have decided to give it a try, hope it won't deter any of you commenting, hope it won't deter me yikes!

11:46 AM  
Blogger Lorena said...

i loved this poem. the imagery of birds writing on the sky "open page" was amazing as well as the leaves whispering. what a magical poem.

8:04 PM  
Blogger Brood Mode said...

a very serene mood sets in after reading this poem

"While whispering
Leaves tried to
Spread the word"

can here the whispering of those leaves

6:47 AM  
Blogger . : A : . said...

As I said before, I liked it a lot. Very nice use of imagery here. Have linked it to my post as well.

10:11 AM  
Blogger Pincushion said...

Absolutely love the imagery especially
'A pegged out sky drenched the trees'!
Never quite imagined the sky like that! very imaginative
And...
I absolutely love those paintings of dogs! They are so real! I could NEVER paint like that!

oohya! ;)
strange how the word verifications are sometimes just soo right!

3:54 PM  
Blogger Russell Ragsdale said...

Classic you, which means Absolutely Great!

1:59 AM  
Blogger gulnaz said...

with such beautiful images you create a perfect, peaceful scene and limited it to 55 words which is tough.
stan laurel quoted goethe in his latest post about beauty being about peace and serenity, something i totally agree with and your post bought it again to my mind.
agree with russell, classic you. :)

7:28 PM  
Blogger iamnasra said...

Wow Sue
You did a good job with 55 words

Im really enjoyed your creatvity over here...

Till then

Take care
Nasra

10:48 PM  
Blogger Queen Neetee said...

You made the result of the task beautiful.

Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms


Wow! Brilliant!

4:47 AM  
Blogger Amie said...

55 word poem! ooooh tough job! but this is a pretty cool one! a relaxins poem

3:53 PM  
Blogger Patry Francis said...

The uniqueness of your vision shines through, Sue. Great poem--and all in 55 words.

4:28 PM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

Blimey, everyone's doing it. 55 word poems that is.
Ad we all have 'A' to blame do we?

9:16 PM  
Blogger Paperslut said...

And this one reminds me of No Need to Argue by the Cranberries.

Simple.

Nice.

12:06 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thankyou for all your kind comments, have just got back from a workshop and I'm a bit tired so will catch up with every one tomorrow

6:57 PM  
Blogger Shubhodeep said...

came through roger's blog.
the poem is lovely, the imagery is stunning.
cheers!
btw, ive written a 55 word poem as well. Find it on my blog:
http://shubhodeep.blogspot.com

10:47 AM  
Blogger Roger Stevens said...

Shubhodeep's poem is excellent, by the way.

As is your poem, Sue. I particularly like the last verse - maybe because I don't quite understand it. The meaning seems just beyond my grasp.

Fifty five word poems everywhere! I guess I'll have to have a go myself.

By the way - this comment is fifty five words long.

11:12 AM  
Blogger Roger Stevens said...

Did you count them?

11:13 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Ooops Roger only 54, glad you like it anyway, but I like it as it is so I might try another. It was how the sky looked honest

Hi Shubhodeep, dito to Roger your poem is brilliant, will be checking your blog again, drop by soon and thank-you

12:25 PM  
Blogger finnegan said...

The number 55 is incidental to the good stuff here Sue.

6:27 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thanks Lorena it takes me back to my holidays, peaceful days on the beach

Brood mode, I'm a big fan of the Faraway Tree, where there is a magic wood that has trees that tell you secrets

Thanks A, plan to try this again

oohya Pins, I dont believe that for a minute, you have an eye for painting the rest is just practice, and as for paint programms, all I can manage with them is a mess, but you draw on them so well

Thanks Russel, your too kind

Great to hear from you Gulnaz, I remember that lovely sun now it is grey and dismal

Thank-you Nasra, your 55 poem is lovely too

Queen N I love the pictures you paint with words

Hi Amie glad you're back and rested
loved the rest room pics

Thank-you Patry

Yes CJ join us 55 is the future

Hi there Wonderwall, great to meet you

Fin thank-you

6:18 PM  
Blogger Queen Neetee said...

I have just joined you in with the party on my link. Welcome abroad.

8:46 PM  
Blogger Green-Eyed Lady(GEL) said...

I adore this entire poem. Phrases in particular: "pegged out sky", "vault" and strong ending:
"Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms"

Silvermoon aka Green-Eyed Lady
http://SilkenThreads18.blog.com

9:54 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Thank-you for dropping by Green eyed Lady and you're welcome any time you have a lovely poem too

6:33 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

It's a party I shall enjoy I'm Sure thank-you

6:46 PM  

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