Hanging
Recently when visitig English August ('A's blog)
I saw he had set a write a 55 word poem challenge
so I had a go. If you would also like to feel free to post them here
A pegged out sky
Drenched the trees
With rays of light
Perfect blue
While whispering
Leaves tried to
Spread the word
Beyond time
Cloudless birds
Vault a white plane
Writing its tail
Across the open page
And I sit and wonder
Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms
55 word poem
I saw he had set a write a 55 word poem challenge
so I had a go. If you would also like to feel free to post them here
A pegged out sky
Drenched the trees
With rays of light
Perfect blue
While whispering
Leaves tried to
Spread the word
Beyond time
Cloudless birds
Vault a white plane
Writing its tail
Across the open page
And I sit and wonder
Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms
55 word poem
posted by Sue hardy-Dawson at 10/24/2005 09:13:00 AM
23 Comments:
Sorry folks have resisted word frgh for as long as I can, so have decided to give it a try, hope it won't deter any of you commenting, hope it won't deter me yikes!
i loved this poem. the imagery of birds writing on the sky "open page" was amazing as well as the leaves whispering. what a magical poem.
a very serene mood sets in after reading this poem
"While whispering
Leaves tried to
Spread the word"
can here the whispering of those leaves
As I said before, I liked it a lot. Very nice use of imagery here. Have linked it to my post as well.
Absolutely love the imagery especially
'A pegged out sky drenched the trees'!
Never quite imagined the sky like that! very imaginative
And...
I absolutely love those paintings of dogs! They are so real! I could NEVER paint like that!
oohya! ;)
strange how the word verifications are sometimes just soo right!
Classic you, which means Absolutely Great!
with such beautiful images you create a perfect, peaceful scene and limited it to 55 words which is tough.
stan laurel quoted goethe in his latest post about beauty being about peace and serenity, something i totally agree with and your post bought it again to my mind.
agree with russell, classic you. :)
Wow Sue
You did a good job with 55 words
Im really enjoyed your creatvity over here...
Till then
Take care
Nasra
You made the result of the task beautiful.
Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms
Wow! Brilliant!
55 word poem! ooooh tough job! but this is a pretty cool one! a relaxins poem
The uniqueness of your vision shines through, Sue. Great poem--and all in 55 words.
Blimey, everyone's doing it. 55 word poems that is.
Ad we all have 'A' to blame do we?
And this one reminds me of No Need to Argue by the Cranberries.
Simple.
Nice.
Thankyou for all your kind comments, have just got back from a workshop and I'm a bit tired so will catch up with every one tomorrow
came through roger's blog.
the poem is lovely, the imagery is stunning.
cheers!
btw, ive written a 55 word poem as well. Find it on my blog:
http://shubhodeep.blogspot.com
Shubhodeep's poem is excellent, by the way.
As is your poem, Sue. I particularly like the last verse - maybe because I don't quite understand it. The meaning seems just beyond my grasp.
Fifty five word poems everywhere! I guess I'll have to have a go myself.
By the way - this comment is fifty five words long.
Did you count them?
Ooops Roger only 54, glad you like it anyway, but I like it as it is so I might try another. It was how the sky looked honest
Hi Shubhodeep, dito to Roger your poem is brilliant, will be checking your blog again, drop by soon and thank-you
Thanks Lorena it takes me back to my holidays, peaceful days on the beach
Brood mode, I'm a big fan of the Faraway Tree, where there is a magic wood that has trees that tell you secrets
Thanks A, plan to try this again
oohya Pins, I dont believe that for a minute, you have an eye for painting the rest is just practice, and as for paint programms, all I can manage with them is a mess, but you draw on them so well
Thanks Russel, your too kind
Great to hear from you Gulnaz, I remember that lovely sun now it is grey and dismal
Thank-you Nasra, your 55 poem is lovely too
Queen N I love the pictures you paint with words
Hi Amie glad you're back and rested
loved the rest room pics
Thank-you Patry
Yes CJ join us 55 is the future
Hi there Wonderwall, great to meet you
Fin thank-you
I have just joined you in with the party on my link. Welcome abroad.
I adore this entire poem. Phrases in particular: "pegged out sky", "vault" and strong ending:
"Until Night brings her washing in
Draping the colours
Over strong lean arms"
Silvermoon aka Green-Eyed Lady
http://SilkenThreads18.blog.com
Thank-you for dropping by Green eyed Lady and you're welcome any time you have a lovely poem too
It's a party I shall enjoy I'm Sure thank-you
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